I Tried to Finish Writing "the Attack of the Zombie Oogies"
Ok so hi there, my name is not important, but you should heed my warning.
So there's a creepypasta out there called "the Attack of the Zombie Oogies". It's not finished as the author appears to have had a mental breakdown whilst writing it due to online harassment and potential mommy issues. So, he seemed to be really triggered by people saying that the story was cliché. Well, I don't think it is, in fact it game me nightmares. Here's a link to it: The Atak of teh Zombe Oogies. As you can see the grammar was not very good but I personally got invested in the tale. So me and my friend 'SkullKillerMan69' decided to finish it. That was a terrible mistake. But you didn't make that mistake did you? You get to learn from our cautionary tale, Lucky.
So me and my good friend decided to clean it up and get rid of those rambling "author's notes" that took up more than half of the story length. We then polished the grammar up and finished writing. I would rewrite the story here for you, but that would only cause more harm. Anyway we finished it and it was bound to be a creepypasta classic - I'm talking top notch like 'Jeff the Killer' or 'Pokemon Creepy Black' quality here. CLASSIC MAN we're still waiting on the Pulitzer Prize. I mean, hell, SkullKiller69 told his mom about and she died of a heart attack! We're the new Steven Kings man that's how sick this was. But no, our road to fortune would be impeaded.
After posting it to the wiki, we got a bunch of good comments saying stuff like "Wow, Spooky" and "This belongs on the Trollpasta Wiki" and I was like "Damn, they want it on more than one website it must be good!" But the spookiest comment of all was one guy who said "I slept with ur mom!" She's dead yo how could he have done that? I just love the creepypasta community... Anyway life was good for the first week - UNTILL... we got a comment from someone named "IKillU.gif" and they said "Hmm very good, I shall inform the original author, EvilSamixx53 of your creation" We were so excited to get to hear from the original facilitator of our MASTERPEICE. But it was not to be...
We got an email from EvilSamixx53 and all it was was a link to a picture. This was the Picture:
We were like "Oh, haha very funny" but it was serious because we then got an alert from Norton 360 that said "Virus detected on your computer, it cannot be removed. You're address has been leaked on the internet and so has all of your private search history - Love Patrixx". My friend was like "Just calm down dude, it's obviously a troll" but his sister overheard our entire conversation and she said "Guys, don't mess with stuff like this, I know things that you don't know." SkillKiller69 said "Shut up and play with you're Barbie dolls, bitch! Girls amiright?" she said "First of all I am 27, secondly there's a guy you should call, they call him Agent Fatty." SkullKiller69 said, "Okay what's you're phone number" then started laughing very hard. She said "Fine! When Patrixx or whatever comes to kill you, don't come crying to me!" he said "Who Patrixx?" she pointed to the picture on the screen, "That face in the background on the right is Patrixx, the other thing on the left is C'Shan, that kid in the middle is possesed!" SkullKiller69 said "Lol it just looks like a hyperrealistic Patrick Star!" Then he melted and screamed "NOO! WAIT!!! NOOOOOOOO!" and he was a melted puddle of flesh that resembled an OOGIE!!! His sister said "NO! I TRIED TO WARN HIM!!! YOU'VE GOTTA RUN AWAY!!!" She didn't have to tell me twice I ran.
I ran to the front door of my friend's house (where I was) but there was the kid he looked just like he did in the picture and I realized he was Sammy Classic Sonic Fan!!! I said "Sammy?" he said "DON'T CALL ME BY THAT NAME YOU FIRICKIN FRICK!!! I AM EVIL SAMIXX AND I WROTE THE ZOMBIE OOGIE STORY AS A TRAP FOR U!!! NOW I CAN KILL YOU!!! WHEN WILL YOU LEARN!? WHEN WILL YOU LEEEEEEEEEEEEAAAAARRRRRRRRRRN!?!?!?!?!?!/1/" I was like "nope" and so I ran and ran but he was chasing me with hyperrealistic beams coming out of his C'Shan Eyes, and I was very scared. I eventually lost him and I decided to go home to my own house because hopefully, they didn't know MY address.
So I got home and all was fine until I got on my computer. It said "Thanks for your confirmation and authorization of your current address. You're gonna die now." I was like "No! This is MY house, and I'm gonna stand my ground!" but just then I saw a spider on the wall and that was just enough to push me over the edge so I was like "OK FINE I'LL LEAVE I'M NOT DOIN THIS!!!" So I packed a few things in my suitcase and I decided to leave the state I was in. (Also blood was already starting to run down the walls) I ran outside and as I was getting into my car a saw a fat guy who looked like Patrixx, but he did not have cone head like Patrixx. He saw me and said "Are you on the run from something paranormal?" I said "Not now man!" he said "Fear not, I am Agent Fatty!" I said "I don't need an exorcist there are spiders in my house I've gotta go!" the man feel to his knees and yelled "Blast you Patrixx!!!" I said "Patrixx? You know about Patrixx?" he said "Yes, you are afflicted by a curse of Patrixx! I can save you!" But just then Patrixx appeared and said "I know who is going to be afflicted!" he said "No!!! My monologue was too long again! Go on without me!" I didn't need to be told twice or thrice for that matter I drove off as fast as I could.
I drove until
the early hours of the next morning. I heard on the radio news that Agent Fatty was found brutally murdered but parts of his body were missing. Which parts? They did not elaborate. Anyway I was very tired from driving and being scared shitless and I found an old motel on the side of the road so I decided to stay the night there. It was called "Not the Hotel where Psycho was Filmed" and the sign below it said "Vacancy, also Patrixx-free!" Just what I need. I went inside and the man said "Hello, I am not Norman Bates, and my hyperrealistic zombie mother is not living in that old house on the hill up there." I said "I do not care I just want to sleep!" he said "Very well you will sleep forever here!" I said "Please suck my knickerbocker or take my money!" he said. "Ok then" he showed me to my room and I was slept the night. The next morning I saw this:
She said "HeLoOoO ThErEeE SoNnY!!! Do YoU WaNt MeE tO maKe YoU SoMe PaaAaaAncaAaKes?" I screamed "Eww! Old people!!!" and marched right into Not Norman Bates's office. I said "I'MA SUE YOU YOU SAID UR HYPERREALISTIC ZOMBIE MOTHER WAS NOT HERE!!!" he said "Lol I told you that she didn't live in creepy house on the hill over there" he pointed out the window "You didn't let me finish son, she likes to sleep in the bathrooms of the hotel rooms. P.S. You have a package." I said "I don't want to see what's in it." he said "Too bad!" it was a box with a dead creature of some kind in it and it's eyes were gouged out the more I looked at it the more I realized it was a real life Oogie from Spore Creatures that had been killed! I said "Oh, that's nice" but then he called the police and I was like "The fuck?" so i just left and kept going down the road but the police eventually caught me and pulled me over.
They said "Ermagad you killed and endagered species! What are you like ten Hitlers? That's worse than killing a person, son! Don't you know that?" I said "It was mailed to me by some psycho!" but they pointed at the fact that it had no eyes. I said "So?" they said "Boy, you're not from around here are you?" I said "Look I'm on the run from Patrixx." They showed me an image I- I- don't wana talk about what it was. And I said "Okay guys, I'm leaving!" I pulled of and they just stared and me until I was out of view. What weirdos.
Anyway, I got to a bit metropolis I think it was like St. Louis or something, you know the place with the single McDonald's arch? Anyway I figured that I would be harder to find in a big city so I tired to find another hotel and I went out on the street and a homeless man said "Oh, so we got us a Patrixx refugee! You think you can just come in here and bring trouble huh?" I said "No I don't have any money." he said "Don't recall askin you for no money. Listen pal if you don't want the moffia to run you outta here you best be leavin k?" I ignored him and checked into a new hotel I checked the bathtubs and there were no hyperrealistic zombie women so that was a plus. Also the hotel was called "Not the Place where You Die". Out of stupidity I forgot and decided to get on my laptop and of course, it said "Thank you for updating us on your location we love trying to find you - Love, Patrixx." I threw the stupid thing out the window and punched a hole in the wall out of frustration cause I'm a irate gamer but then the face of Evil Sammixx was in the hole and he said "HEEEEEEEEEEERRRRRREEEEEEEE'S SAMMY!!!" I was like "COME ON MAN!!! I know you're scary and all but that's kind of a cliché way to do it...
I don't there's words in the English language that can describe what happened next - the sheer amount and rage and anger I saw in Evil Samixx's eyes - maybe live jet engine or something? I don't know man, but yeah I realized what I did and all I can tell you is there where a LOT of lasers and fire and I think I saw what a black hole looks like in reverse. So I'm pretty much completely dead now but because of the time distortion this event caused I can still write this.
So to tie up some loose ends here's the story me and my friend wrote:
The Attack of the Zombie Oogies (Finished Version)
I was a classic Spore Creatures fan. I also like Hero Arena but it just wasn't the same as the old classic 2D version on the old DS. So I woke up one morning and decided to play softball. But instead I thought, "No, I'm gonna go to GameStop." At GameStop I found a Spore Creatures game for only $1.08. I was like "Wow, That's a great price!" It had "Zombie" written on it with Sharpee, and I thought, "Huh, that's a bit odd, but maybe that was the nickname of the kid that owned it before and he wrote that on it so that he wouldn't get it mixed up with his brother's or sister's or something. Or maybe he made a zombie spore creature that he really liked." Anyway I took it to the counter and the man said "A- are- are you sure you want that game?" His voice was trembling. I said "I'm positive" he said "O- Okay- That's nice. But look kid, If you buy that we're all gonna die - I - I- Mean, for that item in particular you- can NOT return it ok? No refunds- It's yours until the end which might me soon. I said "I'll never return it!" He said "Oh - G- Good..." so I bought it. Best $1.08 and cents I ever spent... OR WAS IT!?
I started the game and it started normally, but there was no logo, and for a split second I thought I saw an oogie with no eyes flash on the screen. This game was always pretty glitchy though, so I paid no mind. maybe this is why it was so cheap. Anyway the previous profile was called "Died". I though "Huh, that's a little weird. But then again, if it's a zombie creature it probably died and came back to life because that's how zombies work." I also saw that the date was 2004. That didn't make any since, as a classic Spore Creatures fan, I can tell you that the game came out in 2008... But whoever had it must have just changed the date on their console for some reason. I gave myself a big pat on the back for figuring that out! :)
Anyway I pressed start but something was wrong it looked like there was blood and skeletons everywhere. "WHAT!?" I thought "That's not how this game works!" I moved my creature around who didn't really look like a zombie to me... But then I saw the eyeless oogie from the start screen. But this time it's eyes were red and there was blood all over it. At least I thought it was blood... maybe it was a ketchup glitch... I love ketchup.
I interacted with it and it said "TURN BACK AND GET OUT!!!" then the UFO with Gar'Skuther in it came and out came the evil alien creature himself, but he looked kinda strange, and I thought it was weird that they revealed him this early. Here is an artistic representation of him:
I realised the red stuff all around him was BLOOD!!! I was like "This game isn't for kids! It's been hacked!!!" Evil Gar'Skuther (of course he was the villain before but eviler now because of all the blood and violence blood = more evil) His dialougue said "Haha! Behold the zombie plague has come to the spore creature world! I will infect the galaxy!" then more zombie oogies started appearing and they were hyperrealistic and there was a screeching noise comming out of the speakers that gave me a severe headache. I vommited, but SOMETHING compelled me to keep playing! So I watched as the zombie oogies ate my creature, but instead of rehatching at the nest like your creature normally does in Spore Creatures for Nintendo DS or Nintendo DS Lite, the screen said "INFECTED!!!" in blood red letters. The letters were dripping like REAL BLOOD and it was very realistic and very scary! One might might even say it was hyper-realistic! Becaue it looked like it was beyond the Nintendo DS's graphics capabilites.
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Author's note: I was playing on my 3DS, but still...
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Anyway I was very scared and sure enough my 3DS 3D effect turned on even though this game was for the normal Nintendo DS or Nintendo DS Lite or even the Nintendo DSi!!! and it looked like the zombie oogies were crawing out of the screen! "What the heck is going on!" I shouted! I was so scared I looked around my room but then I looked behind me and there on my bed was a zombie oogie plush doll! And a skeleton poped out of it!!!
The End
Also another thing I would like to clarify, when the policeman showed me the image I couldn't describe - well - it was a picture of Patrixx.
Here's the moral of the story guys, don't stick your nose were it doesn't belong. No matter how good an unfinished creepypasta might be - don't try to finish it. You never know what kind of fricking psycho wrote it in the first place
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