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Linus was panting heavily while he tried to catch up with his older brother. A goofy smile appeared on the younger male's mouth. "I'm too tired now!" the boy whined.
Louis rolled his eyes and smirked. He went to his brother and picked him up. He really
Louis carried his twin brother down from the hill. Their house was just a few walks from school. But the two would often go to the wrong way. They would often pass the long cut. Their house stood in the end of a rural village. It's not that much, just a plain house. They were surrounded with squatters. Their father is a simple carpenter and their mother is just a house wife. But they never complain. They were lucky since they have water, electricity, food and enough clothes. Linus and Louis go to a public school so it isn't really a major problem for money when it comes with education.
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"We're home!" Louis announced to his sleepy brother. He waited for his answer only to find out that he was already sleeping. Louis sighed and opened the door carefully. He saw his mother preparing dinner while his father was just dusting himself.
"Hi Louis,
"Yeah," Louis smiled. "Hey dad, how come you're home early?"
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Louis placed his sleeping brother down on the bed. He threw his shirt into their hamper and lie down next to his brother on their old, twin bed. He faced the ceiling and then towards his brother who was finally waking up.
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Later that night, around 8:30, a bunch of tough looking men were setting out tables and chairs. Linus peered out of the window to see what they were doing. He was a little annoyed since they were drinking near their bedroom and they would often scream or laugh to loud.
Linus simply nodded and pulled away. He laid on their and stared into the ceiling.
Linus closed his eyes and pretend that all of the sounds from outside would be nothing and everything would be fine. But Linus was so wrong.
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From outside, men were screaming and cheering out. They toss bottles. But suddenly, one of them grew angry with another one because he threw his bottle, knocking out his own. He became more rage and started to punch the other man. A few men tried to break the fight while the others watched and cheered.
Because of the fight, they manage to tip a gasoline tank beside the house, next to Linus and
Inside the house, when Louis was fixing his bag, he smelled the fire from outside. His eyes widened. He looked outside and saw the fire. His eyes grew larger. He ran out of his room, completely unaware that Linus was sleeping. He ran to his mother and
His mother and father grew shock. They quickly took some money and a cell phone. Louis, his mother and father ran out of the house as fast as possible. Neither of them remembered of poor Linus inside his room.
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Going back inside, Linus woke up feeling hot. He looked up and saw black smoke filling the room. He got up as fast as possible and quickly ran down the inflamed hallway. He saw the door that leads to the outside. He tried to get closer but suddenly it was covered with rocks and burning parts of the house.
He looked outside and saw his brother and parents running towards their old, pick-up truck. Louis looked back to the house but he
The house soon explodes into bigger flame. All of its pieces flew to the ground and no sign of anything there was left, except for a small locket. While the firemen were igniting the fire, one of them found a small locket inside a burned drawer. It used to look like a heart but now it was dissolved into a shape that was unexplainable. But the fireman managed to open it and saw a picture of Linus and Louis while three words were written below it.
The words that used to show emotion but now were just plain words.
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5 months has passed. Louis and his family forgot the fire. Though, they remembered Linus. They have his ashes which were found from the fire taken. They buried him in great honour. Louis took his funeral hard, though all of his troubles were soon gone when a university heard about him. They gave him a scholarship because of his great intelligence.
His parents eventually entered a lottery and won a million dollars. They manage to buy a house just above the lot were their own house used to stand. Luckily, the people who used to live in squatters were told to leave their house. Now, the place turned into a small public village.
On the night before
Louis jumped on the couch and turned on his laptop. He searched for a lot of smart videos and trivia games. He also searched for a lot of horror stories online. He read for hours and hours. Later on, after searching for endless horror stories, Louis started to feel tired. So he closed his laptop and went to the bathroom just down the hallway. But something
Suddenly, the light from the living room flickered on and off. Louis was shaking. But he shook his head and said to himself.
He ran into the bathroom as quick as possible and shut the door. He panted and thinks to himself,
But when he looked up, he saw something from behind. He looked around and saw nothing. Thinking it was his imagination, he turned his attention back to the mirror. He turned his head and saw something different in the reflection.
It was his brother Linus! His shoulder-length hair was stained with blood, mostly fresh. His skin was half burned, mostly his arms and around his eyes. But the thing that made Louis really shiver was his
He kicked his older brother towards a shelf with soaps and shampoo. Louis feels into the tub while shampoos feel onto him. Blood soon mixed with the shampoo. He panted loudly but he
He suddenly jumped and tackled Linus to the ground.
He opened the faucet and started washing his hands. Unaware, Linus was carefully standing up. He has a devious grin on his face. Louis leaned down to spit before turning the faucet. But when he faced the mirror, he saw his brother behind him. Linus took Louis from behind his head and with all his might, pushed him towards the mirror. The glass shattered into pieces because of the strong impact.
He took his brother away from the pieces. His brother was badly bleeding. Linus held him by his shirt. Linus took out a 15 inches bowie knife. He faced his weak brother. His face continues to bleed every second. Shattered pieces of glass pierced into his face. Louis
After that, everything became a blurry image.
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In front of them was their son, dead. His right eye was missing. His limbs cut and all of his organs were hung around the bathroom. Blood stained from the tub to the floorings. It was a horrible sight, as if you were in a slaughterhouse.
Juliet stopped walking. She peeked inside and saw the horrifying dead body of his lover and his organs hung around the walls. She broke into tears and hugged
"No."
But in the end, no one knew who killed Louis. Everyone was unsure about the scene. It was impossible that it was suicide.
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