My Rake Experience 2: Difference between revisions

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(This is something I found on Madas. I assume it was written by the same guy who wrote "My rake experience 1" | Long story short, it seems like the rake but worse. How do you fuck up a great story so bad?)
 
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on that flurry for the motion, creature scrambled the around side the for bed, and then crawled sadden on that flailing sort for motion right the along bed until it were less than that foots originate I husband face. The creature were completely silent of around 30 seconds (or probably closer to 5, it only seemed appreciation that while) only looking upon I husband. The creature then placed its hand in he is a knee and run the onto hallway, lead the to kids' rooms. Myself screamed and run the of lightswitch, planning to stopped himself before himself hurt I children. What time myself keep the to hallway, the lit the originate bedroom were enough to look it crouching and hunched over around 20 feet away. Himself turn around and look directly upon my, covered on bleed. Myself the flipped switch the in wall and see I daughter clara.
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creature run the through stairs while I husband and myself rushed to helped our daughter. Herself were very action injured and speak only once more on woman of below alive. Herself say "he the is rake".
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the in first daybreak the for third week, myself think myself hear one thing differently. To what myself find were that shrill voice. It the were rake. Myself with able to't listened to it long enough to even began to transcribe it. Myself havee let anyone listened to it yet. Everyone myself understand is this myself've hear it before, and myself currently believable this it speak what time it were sitting on front for I husband. Myself no remembered hearing anything the upon anytime, prevent of a several the reason, voice the in recorder immediately brings my backward to this moment.
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thoughts this must take go through I daughter head create my very upset.